http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch cs Sun, 06 Mar 2016 20:32:26 GMT http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181357 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 20:32:26 GMT MichaelaČ: Yup, it is. Also, kudos for the correct use of 'whom' :) http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181353 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 20:19:21 GMT casa.de.locos: Haha, You got a point. However, it is up to me what I want to share with whom, right? I hope you will read another pieces as well, your opinion is welcomed anyway. http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181351 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 20:04:45 GMT MichaelaČ: Noble reason - does a personal linguistic challenge, however, need to be published on a Czech literary server, where there will hardly be anyone to constructively criticise it or appreciate it with understanding? http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181350 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 19:53:09 GMT casa.de.locos: Overcoming obstacles :) http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181348 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 19:43:41 GMT MichaelaČ: If your inner stream of consciousness is in Czech, why do you write in English then, especially if you recognize that your skills are inferior to your ideas? http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181347 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 19:30:28 GMT Cookie: Děkuji :) http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181346 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 19:30:14 GMT casa.de.locos: Thank you for your opinion. I would not normally react in some sort of defence but since you mentioned the line 'world not anymore black and white' I feel the need to explain it further. I used fronting for this particular line - thus it means that the line is grammatical. And to be fair, I admit that in certain parts grammar truly howls from the lack of the proper english structure. Mainly because I use stream of consciousness to create and write. Therefore my inner monologue is narrated in czech state of mind :) http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181344 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 19:06:28 GMT The first two lines ignited a spark of hope that this wasn't going to be another chliché written in English because it 'sounds better' in my chest, but it has been quickly extinguished by the absolutely excruciatingly wrong 'world not anymore black and white'. You seem to have the vocab down (assuming it didn't come from a random dictionary in vain attempt to sound more interesting), but the grammar howls and screeches, in pain, locked in the iron maiden of your Czech sentence structure. http://www.psanci.cz/dilo.php?dilo_id=33352-torch#181339 Sun, 06 Mar 2016 18:42:21 GMT Moc hezké. :) Zvláště tedy ty první sloky.